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Re: ...An idea...Don't you look in here Melinda!:)
« Reply #30 on: December 30, 2007, 03:51:12 am »
It is very hard to say everything in just 200 words.  Freaking Out
Tell me about it!!!  Freaking Out Freaking Out Freaking Out

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Re: ...An idea...Don't you look in here Melinda!:)
« Reply #31 on: December 30, 2007, 08:26:10 am »
Erin, thats very good so far. You are expressing your feelings and how much Melinda has helped you.  Thumbs Up
Thanks, Donna.  I only have 36 more words left.  I need to think of something great to say with them.  I have been through a lot more than most people think.

I think its good too.  I think you should say what you want in slightly more than 36 words, and then review each sentence carefully to see if you can say the same thing in less words, or not to repeat what you have already said.  I think you will find ways to shorten it some.

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Re: ...An idea...Don't you look in here Melinda!:)
« Reply #32 on: December 30, 2007, 09:29:41 am »
erin, it's great!! you should be proud!!

and alan, you are always so wise  Thumbs Up

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Re: ...An idea...Don't you look in here Melinda!:)
« Reply #33 on: December 30, 2007, 05:59:19 pm »
Thanks, Alan and Megan!  Thanks

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Re: ...An idea...Don't you look in here Melinda!:)
« Reply #34 on: January 01, 2008, 05:48:08 pm »
Here is an attachment of what I have written so far.  Hope you all like it and feedback is welcome.

Erin, that looks great! Your doing a good job keeping it in the 200 word limit! Rose
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« Reply #35 on: January 02, 2008, 01:08:12 am »
Here is an attachment of what I have written so far.  Hope you all like it and feedback is welcome.

Erin, that looks great! Your doing a good job keeping it in the 200 word limit! Rose
Yeah, but I still have some more to write.  I just want to get it done before I start school again next week even though the deadline isn't until March 1st.  I wish I could write more than 200 words!  Crying

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Re: ...An idea...Don't you look in here Melinda!:)
« Reply #36 on: January 02, 2008, 01:43:19 am »
Yeah. I go back to school tomorrow! Crying
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« Reply #37 on: January 03, 2008, 02:14:46 am »
Here is an updated version.  Hope you all like it.  Thumbs Up

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Re: ...An idea...Don't you look in here Melinda!:)
« Reply #38 on: January 03, 2008, 05:33:06 am »
It was great Erin! Can it be 204 words? Thats how much yours was.

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« Reply #39 on: January 03, 2008, 07:01:41 am »
My word counter says 205 words.  But you could take out "even" in the second sentence and in the last sentence remove "than her" from the end.

That is down to 202.  If you break the last sentence into two and take out the "and" you are down to 201.

Lastly remove the "Then" from the start of the 4th sentence and you have 200 words

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Re: ...An idea...Don't you look in here Melinda!:)
« Reply #40 on: January 03, 2008, 11:37:22 am »
My word counter says 205 words.  But you could take out "even" in the second sentence and in the last sentence remove "than her" from the end.

That is down to 202.  If you break the last sentence into two and take out the "and" you are down to 201.

Lastly remove the "Then" from the start of the 4th sentence and you have 200 words

Good ideas Alan!
I agree, it would still sound great too Thumbs Up
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« Reply #41 on: January 03, 2008, 06:10:41 pm »
My word counter says 205 words.  But you could take out "even" in the second sentence and in the last sentence remove "than her" from the end.

That is down to 202.  If you break the last sentence into two and take out the "and" you are down to 201.

Lastly remove the "Then" from the start of the 4th sentence and you have 200 words
Thanks, Alan.  I am going to ask my mom to look it over and see what few words can be taken out.

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« Reply #42 on: January 06, 2008, 11:20:00 pm »
Well, my essay is officially done.  Hope you all like it and it is exactly 200 words.  Huzzah!

 

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